Thursday, January 12, 2006

Satan's Feet

Fleshy tissue stinks, the cadaver burns in sadistic flames…
Screams reverberation, hurt exhausts, Satan’s blame…

Adolescence decomposing, melting corpses, screaming so sound…
Contaminated internal suffer, detestation propels, chaos crowned….

Thrusting fears, brutal piercing spear, fierce anarchy near…
Pungent dust, stench heave, weeping blood-spattered tears…

Persecute innocence, boogie on the bereavement floor….
Run- rabbit-run, hide and seek, trepidation for more…

Darkness scattered, bombs boomed, humanity doomed
Twinge droplets to the soil, melancholy blossom gloomed….

Hate breed and sadistic thoughts, blood bath and suffer creed
Tick-tock, nirvana lost and pain progress, clock ends and life stop…

Trick or treat? Lie or deceit? Struggle or retreat?
Lunacy predict, yielding maniacs… hailing Satan’s feet.

12 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

You mentioned nirvana, dude you get a big fat billion multiplied by infinity.!
Great work.

3:25 AM  
Anonymous Xenab(wordsmith) said...

not bad...but sohail i think u need to shift to a different mode of writing or write abt some different topics...i think its coming to a pt where all ur writings look the same, one cant tell the diff from piece of writing to another...jab ek hee topic pay likhtay rehtay hain to creativity level bhi kam ho jata hai...is lya experiment with new topics, use ur talent to its maximum...

3:26 AM  
Anonymous amby said...

nice yaar 7/31/2005 1:17 AM
g Bilkul Ab app Insaanun PER kuch likhain
bul k phool poudoun aabi janwar janglaat aur urdu main apnay khayalat ka izhar karin app ki nawazish hogee aur apnay undazae bayan ko aur nikar yae plz ap ki mehrbani hgee BHOOT KAHIN k...
yaar nice 1 but Xaniy is absolutely write y dnt u write bout otha hot topicz like Human nature about galaxy han bul k galaxy per kuch likh dalin na plz plz
app ko hum hi sudhaaringey Kyun zainab!?
;)

3:28 AM  
Blogger sohail said...

thanks mate(ak)...

yeh actully im not a sterotype its just that i don't force myself to write on anything unless and untill i want to..so if i want to write on satanism(strange)or hedonism(i don't think so) i'll do that .... just like lovely amby can't stop herself from writing lines and lines about love and xenab from giving us informative and argumantative write ups time and time again...

although i must say alien idea is gud .... alien coming and eating people cuz they are cannibals damn!!! great story idea...

thanks guys

3:29 AM  
Anonymous Xenab(wordsmith) said...

hahahahha!
sohail...u r truly one of a kind

3:31 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

hat makes you so sure about their cannibalsm instincts.
This is a regular hollywood(media-oriented) perception which, I've been trying to defy since years, and years, and years.
But anyway. I like what you write. It's good. Everyone've got their genres. I think you should stick to, and specialize at what you're best at. Fickel minded approaches might lead you to a land of nowhere.

3:39 AM  
Anonymous Razi said...

dude...dude..dude..

4:14 AM  
Blogger Zab said...

ive read this one before, you loser, but its great anyway. keep em coming you kaminay..haha u like that dont u :) lol!

10:10 AM  
Anonymous zabstar said...

update alreaady!!

1:44 PM  
Anonymous aNupRiYa said...

*shudder*
certainly very powerfully written. gets you.
except that its so awful and horrible and dark and abandoned, i actually liked it

2:09 AM  
Anonymous Ardous said...

no com on sure life's rotten and all that crap ..i wud no m a teen but THIS is extreme .......(or is it ..just got my result last week)......but gotta hand it to u bro ..its the vilest one i read here..confused shud i say keep it up?...or plzzz keep it down buried deep within until it just dissipates..definitely powerful

2:10 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

"Thrusting fears, brutal piercing spear, fierce anarchy near…"

The only appealing line. Rest of it is bunch of babel. Words used randomly and joined together even more haphazardly to create a rhyme. Negatively connotative words can not give the poem a dark touch. It barely paints a picture of hell or Satan. This however, at the most, lives up to define a scene from a Hollywood flick; in a c-grade theater, running for obscure teen population. Hills have Eyes/Hostel/Saw...the list is long, scene is one and gore is alike. That is all the poem portrays.

2:10 AM  

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